Ok now you've gone and overloaded the top with text again -- if you're going to use it up there, lets make it a smaller font and use stuff like bold, italics and underline to make it stand out.
Now, tell me this, what is so special about these girls? I can see pics of them? Hell, I can see pics of girls anywhere I want to AND I dont have to pay. Do you have video, do you have their personal sex diaries, what makes you different and worth the money??? Whatever it is tell the surfer, you have to talk him into pulling out his wallet, he's not going to just hand it over for no reason, no matter what you might wish.
Why does one page pop a second? That still makes no sense to me at all. You only pop an exit console on them as a full page as I see it. I could be wrong, I'm just telling you what I have seen work well.
All those thumbs of the girls, now those I would pop into a sized up javascript window that is the same size as the image (maybe 300x for the max on the image size) and then have a join link at the bottom of the image.
This page called order.html -- I am not sure what the purpose of this is, you're causing a surfer to have to click an additional time when you KNOW he is thinking about giving you money -- instead of seeing a place to enter the billing info, now he's got to look at all this? I realize you are trying to make it look like you've got more stuff, but this is the wrong time to do it. You could condense all these sites into a horizontally scrolling window on your other tour pages and have a neat effect without adding an additional page for the surfer to click thru to pay you.
OR if you don't want to do that, at least consider a two page join form. On page one, you can put all that stuff (a little more condensed and less spaced out I think) on the bottom of the page where you collect the surfers user name, password, email address and country of origin, which you then can populate into the Jettis form, while keeping a copy of the email for yourself in case they back out... and if you were to do any geo sorting -- something I would HIGHLY recommend, especially if you aren't going to have resellers, then you would have confirmed country of origin along with IP address to do so.
If any of this makes your nuts sweat, let me know and I'll stop making suggestions
This will be about the only time this year I give them out for free.