That second gallery is FRAUGHT with spelling errors etc.
"You want to see these girls blowjob?" Does NOT make sense in the english language. Something more like
"Do you want to see these chicks give blowjobs?" would be more appropriate. And it's D-E-L-I-G-H-T not Deligt.
"these girls that blowjob there" that doesn't make sense either. You should say something more like "cum and see these girls give hot blowjobs", or somesuch. I know a LOT of TGP owners will not list galleries with TONS of spelling/grammar errors.. A few can slip past, but most of your text doesn't even make sense.
In the first gallery, in that first block of text.. "Well who don't?" that's not a correct phrase. It's "Well who doesn't?"
That's about all I can see with the first one.. other than that they aren't overly bad. Why not try taking text directly from the tour next time. That way you don't have to worry about spelling errors, and you're using text that already sells the site.