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There's some gold in here and this is better than your others but some things to consider:
1. poop jokes are hacky, don't do it. its childish, gross and off putting for most especially with visuals. I guess the doors were opened a bit with the emoji movie and one of the characters is a poop emoji but there is a difference between an animated icon with eyes and shit falling out of a beard! heh
2. Shorten it up! 4 mins is long for a comedic bit. save you some animation work too. Edit!
3. do not politicize your humour out of context like that. 'triggered' is a polarizing word. When you use words like that it takes people away from the joke and stirs up the wrong emotions. Non political humour is supposed to be universal, or at least free from politics or religion. By placing a trolling trump shot in there you remove the bit away from comedy for all and make things politically motivated instead. Saying that, if this were a politically centred skit it would make more sense.
animation was amazing, that chewy part was great and rey walking up the steps in those boots were hilarious though.
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