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There are some spelling and grammer errors:
The correct form is schoolgirls not school girl and make sure that you are consistant with the spelling.
".The hottest asian chicks from the heart of asia ." should be "The hottest Asian chicks from the heart of Asia." (this sounds better "The hottest young Oriental chicks from the heart of Asia.")
"This lusty little school girls keep spreading their legs for that fat cock." should be "These lusty little schoolgirls keep spreading their legs for theat fat cock"
"...cute breast" should be "...cute breasts"
"Asian schoolgirls on full explicit action!" should be "Asian schoolgirls in full explict action!"
Other than that, the site looks okay. I am not a fan of pictures featuring close-up shots of faces only on tour pages. I like the first page with the schoolgirl in the skirt. Maybe the rest of the pages should have a face shot and a skirt shot of each schoolgirl. Names with the pictures would be nice too. Instead of saying "These schoolgirls...", go with something like "Tsing's first homework assignment was to give a perfect blowjob. She found a willing subject to practice on and she was a fast learner. Tsing earned an A+ in her Sex Education class that week and we have the pictures inside!"
Let your imagination soar with the descriptive text ;)
Those are my two cents and some suggestions for what they are worth...
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