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Originally posted by Thomas1007
Kristens skin was afire with anticipation as he kissed her soft moist lips. Tasting the salty desire in his mouth, moving her hips to his hands as he caressed her. Fingertips featherlike upon her
already emblazened skin. His tongue encircling first one sensitive nipple then the other, fingers tracing the contours of her suptle hips... *yawn* lol
ok so what the pro rata for this stuff? I could be a Millionaire lol
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Not bad. Not bad at all. Punctuation needs a little help, but hey, a bit of copyediting helps us all.