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I was buzzing enough to read the whole damn thing ... and personally I think you have a very vivid imagination ... you could sell those stories to paysite owners or maybe even such as penthouse forum ... but maybe one of the lesser known ones to begin with ...
Your story does have several flaws it though ... being married to an Indian woman, I know you are full of shit !!
Any Muslim woman who is wearing traditional muslim clothing is doing so because she is a devout follower of her religeon ...
A muslim woman wearing traditional muslim clothing, woud first off NEVER be allowed to be in a public place with males other than family members, without a brother or husband present.
Another slight fuckup in your fantasy, is your expecting us to believe that she is going to sit in a sauna wearing her blue jeans and shirt, AND full Kaftan, or burka ... yeah OK .. I am following this now ...
I bet you take showers in your 3 piece suit also ... right ??
Your story ... although being very flawed ... does posess a bit of erotic merit ... it ALMOST made my soldier twitch a little bit ...
I give it a 5.5 out of ten ...
With practise, I am sure you may have a future in erotic fiction.
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