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Old 08-01-2002, 01:11 PM  
Snake Doctor
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From your gallery.

You can see more of her at the LSU website. Where their are pictures of her and her friends in the membership area. Tauney and her friends try to make money off their experiences, so of course it's not completly free but almost! Three days for only 6.95 , their are over 40,000 pictures of me and my classmates, having fun and showing our sexy cheerleading bodies off.

In the first 2 sentences you're selling the site in the third person. IE "hey I'm a guy just like you and this is where I go to jerk off"
In the 3rd sentence you're talking in the first person "Hi I'm Tauney see more of me here"

Pick one theme for the page and stick with it. Either have the whole page as the model talking to the surfer or the whole page as you talking to the surfer.

I'd put LightSpeedUniversity in parenthesis after LSU just in case the folks from Louisiana State stumble across your page.

I'd probably use different sales text altogether, but that's just me. Overall its a decent layout, it should get you a few signups
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