Who says you need more than $40 to make a commercial
 

What do you think? Keep in mind it was $40.

It was the most depressing commercial I've ever saw

lol :Oh crap

It's supposed to be dramatic, not depressing.

The music is something out of a funeral , no smiles on faces wearing all black (black guy, other guy in car) I guess it's pretty dramatic but pretty depressing need more smiles :thumbsup

This.

Want dramatic music? Pick Hans Zimmer-ish music.

Two "Business" guys sitting at their kitchen table :2 cents:

eh i feel worst after watching it. as pointed out needs to be happier music. happier and more enthusiastic people.

i though it was like it was one of those "make me feel bad donate to black children" feel.

I agree. if your starting a new business you should be excited as hell. Happy smile upbeat music.

like that black guy would know...

I wonder if I could pull off a happy version with the same clips of the people. They are only $5 each, I guess I could have new ones made lol

Not bad for that money...

whenever someone uses the phrase "paradigm shift" in a commercial..I'm gone...

40 bucks or not (I wouldnt have even edited that for 40 bucks) it's not a good commercial for many many reasons. hire a professional

If we're talking about the death of the corporation, why is all the transitional imagery big, stark city skylines and bustling traffic? Why wouldn't you show small a corner mom and pop store; something fun like a candy shop, maybe with the happy owner making warm contact with a regular customer, getting an internet order and hand-writing a thank you note to put in the shipping container?

And why are all the monologues from men - most of whom aren't even attractive? Rule number one of mainstream marketing is, Put a pretty girl on the cover.

And ditto, what everyone else said about the music, lack of smiles, and paradigm shifts.

Re-shoot. But first, think about it. Your budget should have little to do with your thought process.

I like it.. :2 cents:

Yeah, I did city stuff to show how big, big business is, so it would resonate how intense it is for small business to beat them. I chose the music and told the actors to be serious to give the same effect. I'm not a director or have a very artistic mind I just envisioned something that seemed shocking, dramatic, and mysterious.

If small business did beat corporations for once that would be unbelievably shocking.

I realized I didn't use a girl the day after. Damn it! I'll do new version with some hot chicks when I'm in Costa Rica for sure.

I wouldn't claim it's even close to a masterpiece, for $40 and an hour of editing though, I think it's pretty awesome. And if small business does take over someday (fingers crossed) maybe it will get put in a library.

I don't mean to be a jerk but I've gotten better ads made on Fiverr's whiteboard animation category.

You need a better script and you need to zero in on the viewers' SENSE OF POSSIBILITY.

Thanks man!