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NakedWomenTime 02-18-2016 10:03 AM

Free Sex Story - Sexy Katie Gets Naked On Cam for the First Time
 
Hi Guys

I've written another free sex story, it's Katie Gets Naked On Cam for the First Time.

Let me know what you think. Also, any advice on where stories like this can be promoted? I'm thinking Reddit.

If anyone can link to the blog post, that would be much appreciated.

Thanks

j3rkules 02-18-2016 12:10 PM

You could write a shorter sentences...

baddog 02-18-2016 12:19 PM

I tried to read it, but it was too painful to continue. Are you ESL or is it your native tongue?

NakedWomenTime 02-18-2016 12:49 PM

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Originally Posted by baddog (Post 20732471)
I tried to read it, but it was too painful to continue. Are you ESL or is it your native tongue?

Native. Why so painful?

Rob 02-18-2016 01:23 PM

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Originally Posted by NakedWomenTime (Post 20732502)
Native. Why so painful?

It wasn't painful for me to read, it was just very vanilla. It wasn't fun or inspiring. Reads more like an instruction manual, or a criminal report than a fun story. Try using colorful adjectives and more similes and/or metaphors. If you could imagine having a story read by one of those monotone voice digitizers, that's how it sounded in my head while I was reading it. Maybe that's what Baddog meant. Or maybe he was just half trolling...he is after all, the co-GFY Award Winning Troll. :thumbsup

P.S. Try adding some colors, images, something to your blog. Make it fun, exciting. Do some research on the psychology of colors.

Sednub997 02-18-2016 02:50 PM

Keep writing money will come

Joe Obenberger 02-18-2016 04:03 PM

Write these kinds of narration to accompany photo galleries with edgy, hard images where there is some concern about obscenity issues. Provide a text link for every image, sequentially leading the viewer to the appropriate part of the narrative. Then sell these stories to websites that concentrate in the hardest material out there.

The theory is that, if the site is ever charged with obscenity, the work must, under the law of obscenity, be judged as a "work as a whole". The adjoining link shows unmistakable intent to associate each image with a stream of consciousness rendition of the performer's experience. (Of course, nothing requires any particular viewer to follow the link to visit the narration that the site producer intends as accompanymanet. But this puts the work as a whole issue on much better ground that the previous, failed, argument that each website must be considered together with an image to determine the "work as a whole" regardless of whether there is evidence that there is some unity or purpose in the arrangement of the site.) If that narration approaches dealing with emotion, feelings, individual worth, pride, embarrassment, future consequences, etc. it is likely to be regarded as so closely associated with the image as to be part of a composite work, and if decently written, that composite of image and text may be enough to amount to what the law of obscenity calls "serious value". If a work possesses serious value, no matter how prurient the nature of the content, no matter how patently the depictions offend prevailing social constraints concerning the graphic-ness of the depiction or description, as a matter of law, it can't be criminally obscene. This is because our First Amendment values will not permit the criminalization of any work that contributes in a serious way to a broad conversation about humanity, the conversation that starts in our culture in Mesopotamia and Greece and Egypt. It does not to be Pulitizer Prize material. It just has to deal with the human issues in a serious way that is somehow beyond mere sexual excitation.

Go make some money with that encouragement.

NakedWomenTime 02-18-2016 04:50 PM

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Originally Posted by Rob (Post 20732551)
Try using colorful adjectives and more similes and/or metaphors.

P.S. Try adding some colors, images, something to your blog. Make it fun, exciting. Do some research on the psychology of colors.

OK, thanks for the advice. I will be working on the design of the blog, but to begin with I'm just trying to get some content on there to get visitors.

NakedWomenTime 02-18-2016 04:52 PM

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Originally Posted by Sednub997 (Post 20732614)
Keep writing money will come

Thanks, let's hope so.

baddog 02-19-2016 02:40 PM

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Originally Posted by Rob (Post 20732551)
It wasn't painful for me to read, it was just very vanilla. It wasn't fun or inspiring. Reads more like an instruction manual, or a criminal report than a fun story.

Exactly what made it painful for me.

blogspot 02-19-2016 04:31 PM

can you print this out in brail


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