Paysite tour page critique please, open to suggestions/advice
 

Suggestions are open, tell me what you think of my tour page here folks:

http://www.ndngirls.com/index1.html

lookin good! I only see one issue and that's where you have text. Why are we able to edit it?????? THat's not good!

where is this at?

He's talking about the descriptions of each individual scene. For example "Celene Morningbutterfly" - the descriptive text to the right of this is editable. It's because you have used a text input box rather than something like an iFrame which would work (and look) better.
Other than that the site looks good but I do have one question - Is NDN a well-known abbreviation for Native American Girl in the USA? I have never heard of it before and think that probably a lot of people in the rest of the world won't have heard of it either.
If it IS a well-known saying in the US, maybe you should spell it out for us thickos from elsewhere - maybe putting somewhere in the header what the N, D and N stands for?

Amongst themselves thats what they call each other, NDNgirls... the really politically correct uppity ones (about 5% of them) want to be called "first nations" or "ahnisnabe" just like some educated niggas want to be called african americans and such... there is really no way to please everyone so i kept it simple and i'll take the heat. A lot of my filipino friends in Cali, and even JenniDahling call themselves AZNs (asians). I do have the domains hotnativeamericangirls.com and nativeamericanxxx.com but i think it sounds too politically correct and proper for a porn site, and all those letters would look horrible on a tshirt or anything in print. Hopefully i can brand the term a bit more and people start using and reffering to them as what they call each other anyway. Thnx for the input on the iframe textbox tip

hmm that's all rather interesting! Thanks for the info