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CHMOD · 09-10-2012, 05:44 AM

I have made a new video for my website's tour. Can any native english speaker tell me if there are any spelling errors in the text that sometimes appears in the video?

Thanks!

http://www.18andbusty.com

spazlabz · 09-10-2012, 05:48 AM

"and personal secrets sharing" does not sound right... maybe something like "sharing their personal secrets"

and GOOD GAWD! that is a sexy video!

davethedope · 09-10-2012, 06:01 AM

"Sometimes shy, sometimes exhuberant, always hot and horny!"

That's not a sentence. It works, but why not just throw in "they're always hot and horny."

"Hot and horny" is redundant, but whatever.

Also, "exhuberant"- that's the kind of word a non-native English speaker uses- you also misspelled it too.

The sentance altogether needs to be reworked, because exuberance is not the antonym to shyness.

seeandsee · 09-10-2012, 06:06 AM

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davethedope · 09-10-2012, 06:11 AM

"We offer you only beautiful teens with breath taking natural big boobs. The kind of girl that you see on the street and never forget."

"girl" in this case should be "girls". In the first sentance you're talking about "teens", why in second have the singular?

Also, it's the "kind of girls WHO you see..."

"Exhibiting their perfect shaped body just for you guys"

That's not a sentence. Should be:

"You now have the chance to see them here, exhibiting their perfect shaped body just for you guys."

"perfect shaped body"-> "PERFECTLY shaped BODIES

"Feel the girlfriend experience, have a sneak peek into their personal lives."

AND have a sneak peek etc., or just make that two sentences.

davethedope · 09-10-2012, 06:20 AM

There are other grammatical nitpiks, but more concerning to me is the music- too depressing.

NaughtyRob · 09-10-2012, 09:36 AM

Looking great man!

mikke · 09-10-2012, 09:44 AM

awesome soundtrack man!

ninavain · 09-10-2012, 10:03 AM

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Originally Posted by mikke

awesome soundtrack man!

lol... #sarcasm

this video is the saddest porn video. ever.
I want out of the biz

alias · 09-10-2012, 10:10 AM

Nice girls, breathtaking is one word.

MikeFold · 09-10-2012, 10:12 AM

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Originally Posted by spazlabz

"and personal secrets sharing" does not sound right... maybe something like "sharing their personal secrets"

and GOOD GAWD! that is a sexy video!

i agree with this, and phoshopped is mispelled in the list on the main logo graphic list

davethedope · 09-10-2012, 10:31 AM

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Originally Posted by mikke

awesome soundtrack man!

It's like, are any of these girls still alive?

I feel like I'm watching To Catch a Predator, prelude to a serial killing

CHMOD · 09-10-2012, 11:08 AM

Wow !

I wasn't expecting that much help!
Thanks to all of you for your inputs

Barefootsies · 09-10-2012, 11:46 AM

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Originally Posted by ninavain

I want out of the biz

Quote:

ninavain
So Fucking Banned

Jey p · 09-10-2012, 11:59 AM

The video is not playing smooth. I am under a 6MB connection.

I like your niche. Are u interested and spicing up your tour? I can set up a great deal for your JUST because I like your niche :P

keysync · 09-10-2012, 12:07 PM

I liked the video so much I'm satisfied and see no need in paying for a subscription.
I'll just watch the video again.

Dvae · 09-10-2012, 12:18 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by CHMOD

I have made a new video for my website's tour. Can any native english speaker tell me if there are any spelling errors in the text that sometimes appears in the video?

Thanks!

http://www.18andbusty.com

All natural busty? You might want to remove this one.

MediaGuy · 09-10-2012, 01:13 PM

"Naturaly" should be "Naturally"

"Breath taking" should be one word: "Breathtaking"

Thanks for the boobs :D

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09-10-2012, 06:01 AM	#3
davethedope Confirmed User Join Date: Dec 2005 Posts: 532	"Sometimes shy, sometimes exhuberant, always hot and horny!" That's not a sentence. It works, but why not just throw in "they're always hot and horny." "Hot and horny" is redundant, but whatever. Also, "exhuberant"- that's the kind of word a non-native English speaker uses- you also misspelled it too. The sentance altogether needs to be reworked, because exuberance is not the antonym to shyness.

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davethedope Confirmed User Join Date: Dec 2005 Posts: 532	"We offer you only beautiful teens with breath taking natural big boobs. The kind of girl that you see on the street and never forget." "girl" in this case should be "girls". In the first sentance you're talking about "teens", why in second have the singular? Also, it's the "kind of girls WHO you see..." "Exhibiting their perfect shaped body just for you guys" That's not a sentence. Should be: "You now have the chance to see them here, exhibiting their perfect shaped body just for you guys." "perfect shaped body"-> "PERFECTLY shaped BODIES "Feel the girlfriend experience, have a sneak peek into their personal lives." AND have a sneak peek etc., or just make that two sentences.

09-10-2012, 06:20 AM	#6
davethedope Confirmed User Join Date: Dec 2005 Posts: 532	There are other grammatical nitpiks, but more concerning to me is the music- too depressing.

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